Thursday, October 28, 2010

Faerie Games Teaser

Faerie Games

Melissa Danforth didn’t ask to win a trip to Ireland, she wanted a summer off school to work her butt off and recharge her bank account. Her first day on the island, and a curse attaches to a Ren Faire escapee claiming to be a faerie.

Finn of the Ivy was the most renowned womanizer in the Otherworld, and just getting to be respected for it. That is, until the High Queen banished to the human world for a crime he didn't commit.

Bottom line, they're stranded in a one-room walk-up together and want things back to normal. Normal means getting Finn home using a “key” to the Otherworld. Obstacles include: the only person who knows its location is in Ireland, Melissa's too broke to fly there, and an ancient enemy of the fae is on their tail.

With the race for the key in full swing, if Finn and Melissa’s newfound foes don’t finish them off, the pair might kill each other before they realize they don’t want things back to normal anymore.

1 comment:

  1. The start really put my back to being 16 and working at you nailed a fast food job really well.

    Your dialogue has good flow.
    I'm a little connected to your main MC because she's worked some place similar to me.

    I found it interesting she won an unbelievable trip.

    I would suggest adding in something to be more of a conflict. as it sits, its nice pretty, no holes, but the pace is even, and other than the trip and her manager wanting a date nothing really interesting happens.